tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post116594285870183917..comments2023-05-30T03:03:42.982-07:00Comments on parallax adjustment: Ambush - A Short Storyshooterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06085940732084386201noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post-36680509629114926822008-03-12T15:35:00.000-07:002008-03-12T15:35:00.000-07:00Good writing, finish it our we will have to hurt y...Good writing, finish it our we will have to hurt you.Montehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15329697864994568242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post-78709257922943078702008-01-31T22:11:00.000-08:002008-01-31T22:11:00.000-08:00Ok, that was a good teaser, cough up the rest of t...Ok, that was a good teaser, cough up the rest of the story. Cough it up and nobody gets hurt....<BR/><BR/>if you can't tell, I liked it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post-48966274148135268852006-12-26T10:38:00.000-08:002006-12-26T10:38:00.000-08:00I like it!
To paraphrase someone from back when.....I like it!<br /><br />To paraphrase someone from back when... I don't know what makes good writing, but I know what I like.<br /><br />The pace was good and I was left wanting more when you hit the end. Not sure how I compare to normal people, but I thought you did a good job of explaining things that might need some more info without getting boring or anything about it.<br /><br />That said, my bizarre mind tends to catch virtually all typos instantaneously and it noticed these two:<br /><br />"Gustav said pointing to the Sara and her mom."<br />--delete the first "the"<br /><br />"All outside appearances looked normal, but that didn't mean someone was lying in wait nearby."<br />--should change "was" to "wasn't"<br /><br />Keep up the good work.GunGeekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14217451122521161867noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post-1166062878202665392006-12-13T18:21:00.000-08:002006-12-13T18:21:00.000-08:00This is great, when can we read the rest of it? I...This is great, when can we read the rest of it? I would consider this an excellent start, very believable, it sucked me in. I would think that once the folks on some of the forums out there link to this that you may get some more comments and visits.<BR/><BR/>I have to confess that i am a frequent visitor to your blog but this is the first time i have commented. I read so many blogs that I quite often feel bad for not leaving comments on very many of them. <BR/><BR/>IA_rifleAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11943295.post-1165989665593416062006-12-12T22:01:00.000-08:002006-12-12T22:01:00.000-08:00Good read. You have a real talent for this. Keep g...Good read. You have a real talent for this. Keep going definitely.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com